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To Need Destruction
Contributed by
MissEm
on
Friday, 17th June 2005 @ 12:05:07 AM in AEST
Topic:
secrets
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The room is getting smaller now
As I avoid her eyes
I think it shows
God only knows
The worst of all my lies
My head is throbbing harder now
I'm sure I've lost my mind
His words betray
Her heart whilst play
with mine -- a jest so kind!
My heart is beating faster now
As I ascend the stairs
In his bed
No tear is shed
Gone, my righteous cares
The room is spinning slowly now
A breathless, numbing dream
My tired eyes
Close to disguise
One silent, dieing scream
Copyright ©
MissEm
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2005-06-17 00:05:07]
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Re: To Need Destruction
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by MomentInTime on
Friday, 17th June 2005 @ 12:57:32 AM AEST
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My initial reaction was Great!!! and on second thought it is still great. Loved the added beat of the the two-line rhyme.
lol I'm sure there's a more technical way of describing it
Jordan :o) |
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Re: To Need Destruction
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by Winterland on
Friday, 17th June 2005 @ 08:48:55 AM AEST
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I loved it! I can feel your pain, and it makes me want to know more so I can help you. lol or maybe that's just me, who knows.
Fabulous.
Jennifer |
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Re: To Need Destruction
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by Man_On_High on
Friday, 17th June 2005 @ 08:12:39 PM AEST
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I tried to pick a stanza to quote..
but to no avail..
I love 'em all!
This was an incredible write..
fraught with the vision..
and done in that old world style
that I love so much and often use myself..
the best by you that I have read yet-
Very very well written..
I can't say enough..
(lest I gush.. lol)
Billy |
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Re: To Need Destruction
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by Justintears on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 08:04:01 PM AEST
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| with every write you create, i fall more into beauty of it. Brilliant... I anticipate your future of emotions......... |
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