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The Note
Contributed by
ForeverAndADay
on
Friday, 17th June 2005 @ 05:29:22 PM in AEST
Topic:
scifi
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If it comes before I wake up
Please God let someone
find this note
and send it to
someone who can
help...
I tried the antidote
it didn't work...
Theres something missing...
The sky looks wrong
The ocean is blood red
I can see the shadows
Lord, the shadows!
It isn't what we thought...
It's nothing like we thought!
The eyes...
So many...
So dark
So cold
The screaming...
please
If you
Find this
Please tell someone
Tell them
To warn
them
Tell
Them
To
Warn
Everyone...
Its coming...
...
...
...
...
Copyright ©
ForeverAndADay
... [
2005-06-17 17:29:22]
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Re: The Note
(User Rating: 1 )
by Sinned on
Friday, 17th June 2005 @ 06:34:23 PM AEST
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ForeverANDADAY
Different
I gave a 3
Just because
I didn't know
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Re: The Note
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by nightwolf on
Friday, 17th June 2005 @ 07:09:59 PM AEST
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| it was good, but unclear |
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Re: The Note
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by foxfire44 on
Friday, 17th June 2005 @ 08:38:39 PM AEST
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| this does leave you wondering what is coming.....is there going to be a part 2 to this......a good suspense poem thoughI give you a 3 for effort |
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Re: The Note
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by sprinter27 on
Friday, 17th June 2005 @ 09:14:08 PM AEST
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what is exactly coming? i would like to know... it was a questioning and suspensful write, though... keep up the good work.
~sprints |
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Re: The Note
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by mom11159 on
Wednesday, 17th August 2005 @ 09:42:41 PM AEST
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Yes this does leave you wondering but that is sci-fi always wondering I thought it was excellent well written leaving you in antisipation do agree you should write apart 2 I would definately read it loved this one
Cathy |
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