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Bewitching
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
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Saturday, 18th June 2005 @ 09:26:10 AM in AEST
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Swirls of smoke fill the air
taunting me to go places I do not dare
In the haze I do indeed see
dancing visions of you and me
Taking a sip of an exotic elixir
I see what you're saying but it seems to perplex her
hands on my hips; feel me bump and grind
I can sense your presence even though you're hard to find
Whisper spells in my ear
capture the moisture when I drop a tear
Whisk me away from the crowd and the noise
show me you're far different than those other boys
Speak to me from across the border
I'll let you know if you're out of order
Tell me what you want me to do
I'll bet you've always wanted that said to you!
Push through the crowd; lead me away by the hand
press me up against the wall and take the love you demand
Emotions we feel thick like the smoke that suffocates
anticipation and the thrill cause our bodies to precipitate
Once our bond is complete
we shall have the world at our feet
Lead me away to that place you call home
cause I think I've caught your enchanting syndrome...
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Re: Bewitching
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by emystar on
Saturday, 18th June 2005 @ 09:38:00 AM AEST
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Very creative.
Good work.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: Bewitching
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by Vampirequeen on
Saturday, 18th June 2005 @ 11:21:34 AM AEST
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awsome write scorp.
I really like this one. |
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Re: Bewitching
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by jyssvw22 on
Saturday, 18th June 2005 @ 11:37:59 AM AEST
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this was fantastic...
one of my favorites
i love this line so very much..hits right home.........
Speak to me from across the border
I'll let you know if you're out of order
Tell me what you want me to do
I'll bet you've always wanted that said to you!.... |
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Re: Bewitching
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by DorianChambers on
Saturday, 18th June 2005 @ 01:47:43 PM AEST
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Indeed a facinating write projects little murals
of episodes in bits and peices . . .
Ben |
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Re: Bewitching
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by sweetangeluk on
Saturday, 18th June 2005 @ 06:02:00 PM AEST
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Fabulous great flow
Love Angelxxxx |
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Re: Bewitching
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by Man_On_High on
Saturday, 18th June 2005 @ 08:27:03 PM AEST
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Phew.. lol
Very provocative write scorp..
(wipes sweat from forehead)
I pictured every word..
much feeling and emotion here..
I need a smoke..lol
B |
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Re: Bewitching
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by MorningDove on
Saturday, 18th June 2005 @ 08:35:38 PM AEST
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Wow, all I wrote about was a peach !! lol This is quite sensually intoxicating. I think I need another peach.
Rita |
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Re: Bewitching
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by pUnKa_RaCh on
Sunday, 19th June 2005 @ 10:43:18 PM AEST
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woo hoo!!! I liked this alot scorp.
So very deep and yet very thrilling.
Well done, awesome ending |
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Re: Bewitching
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by secretwind on
Monday, 20th June 2005 @ 12:13:57 AM AEST
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sweet flow
well done |
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Re: Bewitching
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 20th June 2005 @ 09:16:36 AM AEST
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| Wow!!!! Yet another awesome write from the Scorp!!!! I love it! |
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Re: Bewitching
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by Willofree on
Monday, 20th June 2005 @ 11:47:59 AM AEST
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A sultry experience calls for a sultry sharing...
:) This is a vivid artistic expression of a poem that has fantastic imagery and presentation style.
Well done, Scorp
Will |
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Re: Bewitching
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by boobiepeach on
Monday, 20th June 2005 @ 12:34:42 PM AEST
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scorp great imagery. beautiful keep it up
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Re: Bewitching
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by In_a_while on
Tuesday, 21st June 2005 @ 03:45:07 PM AEST
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| Very, very good! the emotions were wild and the atmosphere just sooo on the edge! whew! very nice climax at the end as well.. i'm glad i read it and look forward to more! dwayne |
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Re: Bewitching
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by frmpoison2static on
Monday, 4th July 2005 @ 07:23:09 PM AEST
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| i liked it...painted an image in my head...love they way it flowed.. excellent poem. |
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Re: Bewitching
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by deadheadpoet on
Friday, 15th July 2005 @ 11:12:27 PM AEST
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| Wow this just gave me a feeling of days long past. Some dusty cantina, way south in Mexico. An old movie. I don't know it just took me away. I like how your poetry does that. You are an excellent writer. Peace to you. Laura |
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Re: Bewitching
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by ladyfawn on
Friday, 14th November 2014 @ 11:46:50 AM AEST
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beautiful, sensuous and a joy to read, i don't know why tho
i would love to read something like this from you about time
travel or medieval lovers, i know you could write it and blow
us all away like you always do:)
hugs n' love nessa
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