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Lyrics of Life
Contributed by
sride686
on
Sunday, 19th June 2005 @ 12:00:56 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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Hate, pain, lust and distrust
These lyrical words
Of this life that makes us
Death and pain
Filled with greed
A lyrical lust
In a life that we need
Words that speak lies
With lyrics that bleed
They cute to your heart
And make your life week
You speak their song
As you sing along
Blinded by greed
From a existence that you need
Lyrics of truth
That are lost in your youth
Lost in complex words
That confuse your mind
And pass threw your thoughts
With riddles and rimes
Words that are right
And strategically placed
To take over this world
And deface your faith
They take over your mind
With their lyrical rimes
Rimes that repeat
With in your mind
Repetitive redundant bullsh it
thats lost with in time
They influence the darkness
thats with in your mind
The very depths of your soul
Where your hatred hides
Its concealed with destruction
And lost is your mind
So give in to your hatred
And in death find your trust
And be freed from this life
Of a lyrical lust
~Steve~
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sride686
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2005-06-19 12:00:56]
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Re: Lyrics of Life
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by hauntedscorp on
Sunday, 19th June 2005 @ 12:40:27 PM AEST
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Wow strong finish Steve---I like it! Well done.
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Re: Lyrics of Life
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by Wandering-Soul on
Sunday, 19th June 2005 @ 01:28:50 PM AEST
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| Very good poem...and it holds a measure of truth. I am quite impressed. |
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Re: Lyrics of Life
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by Fionndruinne on
Sunday, 19th June 2005 @ 10:04:25 PM AEST
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Interesting work. A few more spelling errors than it needed, and I think you used the word 'lyric' a bit too often in the beginning of the poem. But enough with criticism. It's good work, and with a little polishing can be better. Keep it up.
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Re: Lyrics of Life
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by Vampirequeen on
Monday, 20th June 2005 @ 03:22:53 PM AEST
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wow awsome job on this one.
very stronge ending.
take care
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Re: Lyrics of Life
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by boobiepeach on
Tuesday, 21st June 2005 @ 11:25:37 AM AEST
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wonderful write. powerful and a bit sad. but very well said. please ----more
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Re: Lyrics of Life
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by Dorkfish on
Tuesday, 21st June 2005 @ 11:43:48 AM AEST
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| Steve, that was a great one! Good job. Hope you're doin ok! |
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