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Maybe It's Hope
Contributed by
xXx_lil_pyro_xXx
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Sunday, 19th June 2005 @ 06:23:18 PM in AEST
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I dont know whats keeping me from,
Fulfilling what I want.
I dont know what grips me here,
When ghosts and memories flaunt.
Maybe it could be fear,
Or maybe it could be doubt.
Maybe its the question mark,
Thats blocking my way out.
I cant find whats saving me,
When I dont want to be saved.
I cant figure out what it is,
Thats keeping me enslaved.
Maybe its curiosity,
Maybe its commitment.
Maybe its just not my time,
To lose or give up yet.
I cant guess at it,
And its not going to appear.
The reason why I couldnt do it right,
The reason why Im still here.
Maybe I do know what it is,
Thats helping me to cope.
Some call it drive, some call it choice,
But maybe its just hope.
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Re: Maybe It's Hope
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by xxbreathlessx on
Sunday, 19th June 2005 @ 06:49:16 PM AEST
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| i liked this. it seemed more uplifting than most poems. sometimes hope is really all you have and you displayed this in your poem very well. good job, keep on writing. |
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Re: Maybe It's Hope
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by xXcrossedXx on
Friday, 24th June 2005 @ 06:45:02 PM AEST
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Karis you're getting better everytime I read, great write! My favorite stanza is:
Maybe it could be fear,
Or maybe it could be doubt.
Maybe it’s the question mark,
That’s blocking my way out.
But the question mark line is the best part, I think. This was a great poem and inspirational, I remember going through that phase and to this day I don't know what it was I think it might just be hope... I just hope yours stays there.
My only advice is that I think the middle might have dragged on too much maybe you could delete a stanza or if there are a few lines or ideas you really like switch the stanzas up..
Well done,
Amanda |
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