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I remember someone special...
Contributed by
IN_a_While
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Tuesday, 21st June 2005 @ 04:47:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
LoveRemembered
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it's been so long since i've seen her face
so sweet and soft to me
it's been so long since i shared her space
i wonder what she thought of me
it's been some time since she was my rhyme
so gentle were the words of hers
it's been some time since she was mine
much softer than the softest furs
no more rhymes to disguise my smile
it was good to see her for the while
she was like cool rain, on the hottest day
i smiled inside, my heart did play
but, time is always in the sun
and burns me when i stay too long
i'm scared of what's now found in fun
i'd rather fade like everyone
so i'll walk into the crowd...
dw
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Re: I remember someone special...
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by Justintears on
Tuesday, 21st June 2005 @ 04:54:01 PM AEST
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| I can defin. relate. Makes me feel the memories. Nice! |
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Re: I remember someone special...
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by JasTrask_22 on
Tuesday, 21st June 2005 @ 06:14:52 PM AEST
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this is reallly good. you let the reader know how you feel or felt or still feel about this person. great job! i like the sentence at the very end. very nice!
Keep Smilin'
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Re: I remember someone special...
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by Man_On_High on
Tuesday, 21st June 2005 @ 10:34:53 PM AEST
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I loved the last line..
admittedly..it's something I would've done..
great write-
B |
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