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Rainbow Colored Crayon Scribbles
Contributed by
hooray_its_jen
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Tuesday, 21st June 2005 @ 06:07:31 PM in AEST
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In and out. In and out. It's 11:30 at night and you're fast alseep in my arms. Your slow deep breathing always seems to put me in some kind of trance, makes me want to spend eternity with you in your dreamland of ponies and princesses and flowers. In and out. In and out. I run my fingers through your hair, just like she used to do with mine.
And right now...crayon scribbles mean so much more than color splotches on scrap paper. They're beautiful.
I remember the first day you came home, how we were all so excited to watch you play around and make all sorts of cute baby noises. And we were all disappointed because you just slept all day.
But in a lot of ways...you're more beautiful when you sleep, with your thumb in your mouth and your other hand curled up into a tiny fist, along with the in and out of your breathing. Honestly, I don't really mind when you climb into bed with me on nights like tonight when you can't sleep and neither can I. It's ok to be scared, because sometimes I am too.
And if I squint my eyes in just the right way, I can actually make out the picture in all those rainbow colored crayon scribbles on the paper...
I love you Bitty : )
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Re: Rainbow Colored Crayon Scribbles
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by MorningDove on
Tuesday, 21st June 2005 @ 06:15:37 PM AEST
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So beautiful, Jenna. Crayon scribbles can and do bring tears to my eyes. I still have scribbles and little notes from my grown children. Now I have a collection from my little grandchildren. Love you sweetpea.
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Re: Rainbow Colored Crayon Scribbles
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by xxbreathlessx on
Tuesday, 21st June 2005 @ 06:27:08 PM AEST
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wow. mind-lowing beautiful. i can really relate to this poem(my neice). and its nice to see someone appreciate the simple moments. i especially loved the line :
"And right now...crayon scribbles mean so much more than color splotches on scrap paper"
and how you repeated the "in and out".
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Re: Rainbow Colored Crayon Scribbles
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by JasTrask_22 on
Tuesday, 21st June 2005 @ 06:33:04 PM AEST
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what a marvelously awesome write. i love little drawings that my cousins make for me! haha they're soo cute, i love the line" crayon scribbles mean so much more than color splotches on scrap paper. They're beautiful." thats awesome!! sooo cute. LOVED IT!
JAzz.z.z
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Re: Rainbow Colored Crayon Scribbles
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by lostinmyself on
Tuesday, 21st June 2005 @ 06:37:50 PM AEST
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*Has read this 3 times so far and still isn't quite sure what to say...*
This is very deep and seems to have a lot in it. Many meanings. I also like how it's very you.
Personal, I think I'm trying to say. lol.
The way you describe things is awesome.
I love this hun,
Great write,
*hugs* Phil xxx |
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Re: Rainbow Colored Crayon Scribbles
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by freckle on
Tuesday, 21st June 2005 @ 08:10:20 PM AEST
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What an absolutly wonderful poem. I love young children. I miss mine being so little. Jen, you did a terrific job of describing how beautiful they are; just by being themselves. Great imagery.....
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Re: Rainbow Colored Crayon Scribbles
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by blowfish_jane on
Wednesday, 22nd June 2005 @ 04:45:30 AM AEST
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Jen, this was such a beautiful, tender, heart warming write.
I like the imagery you gave to the reader, and like Phil said, this was more you than i have seen (from previous poems).
Jane xxoxx |
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