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Trivial Pursuit
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
on
Wednesday, 22nd June 2005 @ 01:46:25 AM in AEST
Topic:
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An answer in a puddle of rain
admission of a guilty pain
Questions stacked high collecting dust
a heart continuously ignored starts to rust
One step forward leads to three steps back
want to fill this void and receive what I lack
One plus one equals two
but where are you ?
Procrastination is just another word for delay
the empty feelings you have; it needn't be this way
I want to make a move, but need you by my side
why can't you just give in and drop your foolish pride?
I won't stick around waiting for answers I'll never receive
if you can't give me what I need I'll have no choice
but
to
LEAVE.
Copyright ©
hauntedscorp
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2005-06-22 01:46:25]
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Re: Trivial Pursuit
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by ABySs on
Wednesday, 22nd June 2005 @ 02:04:33 AM AEST
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we all wounder whats to be later in life but
life doesnt go the way we plan it
as for your poem i like it tho iv heard many of
those lines befor
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Re: Trivial Pursuit
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by DorianChambers on
Wednesday, 22nd June 2005 @ 10:29:06 AM AEST
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A nice write scorp firm and decisive your a fine poet u know that love your poetry good
comand of emotions and expressing them
well done as with all of them scorp . . .
Ben |
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Re: Trivial Pursuit
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by Dorkfish on
Wednesday, 22nd June 2005 @ 12:49:37 PM AEST
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| Hey, I like it. I like how it doesn't really have a style it's just funky. Great job Scorp...I'm glad you got inspired! :o) |
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Re: Trivial Pursuit
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by sride686 on
Wednesday, 22nd June 2005 @ 01:47:02 PM AEST
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| Wow this was a strong write. Very well written and worded and flows so well. There is a lot of emotions in this write and it is hard when your life turns this way. Pride is hard for some to get over I know I got a lot of it myself. Take care and keep up the good writes….Steve |
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Re: Trivial Pursuit
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by Jimmato on
Wednesday, 22nd June 2005 @ 06:34:04 PM AEST
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hey scorp, not a fan of 'playing for keeps' but this ones good, first line is the seller.
:) jimmy |
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Re: Trivial Pursuit
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by Man_On_High on
Wednesday, 22nd June 2005 @ 10:21:50 PM AEST
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WOAH!
love that ending Scorp!
powerful and dignity retained..
awesome!
I love this-
B |
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Re: Trivial Pursuit
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 23rd June 2005 @ 07:32:22 AM AEST
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| Wow, another great write from you, Scorp. Powered with emotion but this time the decision made. Great write! Great ending. |
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Re: Trivial Pursuit
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by Willofree on
Thursday, 23rd June 2005 @ 03:23:57 PM AEST
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I like it Scorp. You might say a modern version of either _____ or get off the pot. :)The poem is succinct and to the point. A great title.
Well done Scorp
Will |
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Re: Trivial Pursuit
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by Alibi on
Saturday, 3rd September 2005 @ 12:09:57 AM AEST
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Oh my dear! Is this the same person you speak of now? I enjoyed reading this, it gave me some insight into your pain. It was well written, and that is a clever title!
Smiles and blessings. |
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