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upon a golden wing
Contributed by
chantel
on
Tuesday, 7th January 2003 @ 05:00:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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10 days go by and still no word
untill they see the tiny bird
this bird was not ordinary
it was very extraordinary
you see it had a golden wing
upon this wing there was a string
and on this string there was a note
this bird in mid- flight
started putting up a fight
on the 11th day this bird was dead
you see it had not been feed
becouse of this a girl cried
when she looked down where the bird lay
she saw that note and decided to stay
she told the world from that day on
about the bird with the letter
the note said:
"i wish my life had been better".
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chantel
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2003-01-07 17:00:00]
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Re: upon a golden wing
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Tuesday, 7th January 2003 @ 05:43:16 PM AEST
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This is so beautiful.. a bit sad... it just grabbed me by the heartstrings....
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Re: upon a golden wing
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by EmSal on
Tuesday, 7th January 2003 @ 07:03:44 PM AEST
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| Whoah this is a really really good poem, so vividly real and touching yea. |
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Re: upon a golden wing
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by atwojay on
Tuesday, 7th January 2003 @ 07:22:55 PM AEST
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| So true: we all wish our lives were better. I was wondering though, if you meant to say that the bird "had not been fed" rather than "had not been feed." That way it rhymes. |
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Re: upon a golden wing
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by chantel on
Tuesday, 7th January 2003 @ 09:09:50 PM AEST
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that is what i ment i really apreciate you pointing it out to me i will change it as soon as i can thank you agian
chantel |
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Re: upon a golden wing
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by OreO on
Wednesday, 8th January 2003 @ 09:01:56 AM AEST
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I like the style you put here with this write it's uniquely written, and very beautiful....thanks for sharing it Chantel...
.:*~*:.OreO.:*~*:. |
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