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Mosquito Creek
Contributed by
expired_promises
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Monday, 27th June 2005 @ 10:42:40 AM in AEST
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After walking through the trees
and breathing in the moist forest floor,
we came upon the creek.
The newly thawed sand was warm
as it squished between our toes.
Numbing water slapped against ours legs
as we ran in an out
unable to bear the cold.
We buried our feet in the sand until
we could feel the tingle of circulation.
Laying on our backs we silently
looked above us at the blue patch
of sky surrounded by trees thinking,
if something this beautiful is possible
anything is.
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Re: Mosquito Creek
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by secretwind on
Monday, 27th June 2005 @ 10:46:47 AM AEST
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| Kool flow |
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Re: Mosquito Creek
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by Caleb on
Monday, 27th June 2005 @ 10:53:49 AM AEST
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| Sweet, very sweet, and yes it sounds like a wonderful moment. worth living for. |
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Re: Mosquito Creek
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by blackmarker on
Monday, 27th June 2005 @ 01:48:35 PM AEST
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Simply fabulous.
How true, 'if something this beautiful is possible
anything is'.
Thank you for posting!
- Cat |
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Re: Mosquito Creek
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by Silent-No-More on
Monday, 27th June 2005 @ 09:19:25 PM AEST
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Rarely do I wish for a picture to accompany the poem. In this case, though, I do --- if only to 'see' whether the image that came to mind mirrors the location that you've described. You've somehow managed to express the beauty without beating us over the head with it. I love that you chose to express the moment/actions instead of just the scenery... there is a sense of excitement and enjoyment that naturally flows though here, making the detail of the place unnecessary. Nicely done!
~Snemmy |
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Re: Mosquito Creek
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by Mara on
Monday, 27th June 2005 @ 09:24:45 PM AEST
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| i love this! it's just really pretty. |
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Re: Mosquito Creek
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by CarolinaBlue on
Monday, 27th June 2005 @ 11:24:45 PM AEST
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What a fantastic write! It took me right back to some of the best moments I ever had as a child. Cherish that moment forever as they are sometimes far and few between. Bravo!
~R |
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Re: Mosquito Creek
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 30th June 2005 @ 05:35:16 PM AEST
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This poem is great and you get props from me GOOD JOB
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Re: Mosquito Creek
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by daprdan on
Tuesday, 4th October 2005 @ 12:34:40 AM AEST
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This really feels good to read...
I love your memories and the outlook on life...
Very inspiring... |
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