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Melted Charcoal
Contributed by
harlot20
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Tuesday, 28th June 2005 @ 10:33:42 AM in AEST
Topic:
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Lean against the wall
Fingers against the window
And sing a different tune
Each year
As you grow older
Your white ship
That you haven't changed
In ages
Let your eyeliner run
Softly down your cheeks
Like melted charcoal
From the ashes
Of your passion
Oh
The past forgets
You're gone up in smoke
In the ashtray at your bedside
So drink the fairy
Wish on the coin
Then flutter your eyelids
Then dream softly
As your world fades out
As your world fades to black
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harlot20
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2005-06-28 10:33:42]
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Re: Melted Charcoal
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by bgj on
Tuesday, 28th June 2005 @ 11:23:27 AM AEST
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I find this poem interesting although I don't quite understand all of it. Good job!
bgj
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Re: Melted Charcoal
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by deathdrop on
Tuesday, 28th June 2005 @ 02:07:49 PM AEST
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wow!
THIS-IS-AMAZING!
i like it where you put
'sing a different tune'
'Let your eyeliner run
Softly down your cheeks
Like melted charcoal'
'So drink the fairy
Wish on the coin'
'As your world fades out
As your world fades to black'
... those parts reeally pulled this poem together.
i under stodod this, i think... and i love it!
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