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That Cold Night
Contributed by
BloodyTearDrops
on
Wednesday, 29th June 2005 @ 08:27:31 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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The night was so cold
The pain was still alive
People standing all around
I can still their cries.
People were so scared
Everybody was by his side
He had promised us all
But to us he lied.
Police and Fire trucks
And Ambulance too
They went to see how many were hurt
To their surprise, It was only few.
They carried him away
His mother right next to him
She was holding his hand
Tears streamed down her face,
As he said his last word?Kim?
As the got to the hospital
He let go of his mother
She screamed his name
As his face they covered.
(Dont ever end up like this.
You will never find happiness
You will never get another thing.
And maybe not even a first kiss.)
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2005-06-29 20:27:31]
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Re: That Cold Night
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by xxbreathlessx on
Wednesday, 29th June 2005 @ 09:07:51 PM AEST
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| i think this was great, but maybe by giving the reader more of a background to what happened we can understand this poem better. I think the sadness really comes out here and you did a good job. sorry for what happened. |
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Re: That Cold Night
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by emystar on
Thursday, 30th June 2005 @ 05:45:00 AM AEST
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Sad but great writing.
Huggs,
emy |
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Re: That Cold Night
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by emystar on
Thursday, 30th June 2005 @ 05:45:25 AM AEST
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Sad but great writing.
Huggs,
emy |
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