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Secrets
Contributed by
PoisonousPyscho
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Wednesday, 29th June 2005 @ 09:35:59 PM in AEST
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Secrets
In a world full of secrets
In a place full of lies
A daughter loves her mother
As she watches her die
In a land full of darkness
In a room full of fear
A daughter does not cry
But she sheds a single tear
In a place where reality
And her dream world collide
A daughter is thrown in the middle
Of a giant landslide
So many secrets
And nowhere to hide
A daughter is lost
Cold and glossy-eyed
In a world full of secrets
In a place full of lies
A daughter loves her mother
As she watches her die
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Re: Secrets
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by xxbreathlessx on
Wednesday, 29th June 2005 @ 09:47:08 PM AEST
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| one word to describe this..: Powerful. Its just really strong poetry, you did an amazing job. |
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Re: Secrets
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by THORN on
Wednesday, 29th June 2005 @ 09:54:20 PM AEST
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I am ever so sorry... That is some truely powerful poetry, very moving, fantastic because it came from the heart. The change in rhythm also keeps the reader alert, very nice job.
Keep writing, don't dread on it too much. Seek help for her.
Cheers,
-xXRayeXx |
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Re: Secrets
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by CarolinaBlue on
Wednesday, 29th June 2005 @ 09:56:23 PM AEST
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| Very deep and extremely raw poetry! I am so sorry you've been put in such a position as this. It's hard to be young and have to take care of your mom when she should be taking care of you. I hope that she gets the help that she needs and that there is someone close to help you get through the dark times. ~R |
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Re: Secrets
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by PoisonousPyscho on
Wednesday, 29th June 2005 @ 10:06:00 PM AEST
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| the sad part is that she thinks i dont know that she is sick...i know everythign though even stuff i never wanted to know...so many poeple have offered to get her help but she wont accept it and even tho she has done so many bad thigns to me (neglect & abuse a couple of years ago...ended up in a foster home and then moved in with my dad) i still love her so much.... |
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Re: Secrets
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by WorthlesSanity666 on
Wednesday, 29th June 2005 @ 10:32:17 PM AEST
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This really is powerful and even more emotional. I'm so sorry. I'm always here if you need to talk to someone. The last 3 stanzas blew me away!
*Naomi* |
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Re: Secrets
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by justme03 on
Thursday, 30th June 2005 @ 12:00:49 PM AEST
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awww
i wish i lived closer to ya. im here to talk to tho netime. luv ya. awesome poem, very powerful and breathtaking.
~Kortnie~ |
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