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The Land of Dreams
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Friday, 1st July 2005 @ 06:48:52 AM in AEST
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Once upon a dream in my child hood
I walked with my mother along a street
Looking toward sky in the silent night
With a twinkle in her eye she told me
"Look at the milky ways there our Lord
Sits in contemplation on his own creation!"
Then I saw a huge ethereal shape of Lord
Formed out of countless stars over the void.
* * *
Once upon a dream in my school days
Awakened to the sweet notes of birds
Among the bushes and trees of paradise
I saw heavenly damsels robed in silks
Singing and moving on a fantastic gait
Collecting fragrant flowers in their baskets
They past towards the golden gates of East
In a hurry to attend their princess Dawn.
* * *
Once upon a dream in my college days
When I was sleeping ashore of an ocean
Awoke in a dark hall of my heart cavern
As I read hieroglyphs and carved images
In a flash of lightening appeared a goddess
I saw her lovely feet dancing on a dais as
Sweet notes of lutes played on my nerves
Rhythmic beats of drums coursing in blood
In a rapture of sweet delight senses fainted
Then she told- "I am the princess of sun world
I love you; I wish to share my love with you
If you can find me among the men of world
I would offer this heavenly lotus of my love."
Stating thus flashing smiles she had shown
Me a dazzling diamond lotus of Sunbeams
Over her bosom and vanished in my dream!
* * *
Venkat
1-7-2005
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Re: The Land of Dreams
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by brew on
Friday, 1st July 2005 @ 08:26:38 AM AEST
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just WOW..................what a read. Excellent.Yes please do send more
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by NoSaint on
Friday, 1st July 2005 @ 08:52:58 AM AEST
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very inspiring...of course I am interested in reading more my friend
Shari |
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by Jenni_K on
Friday, 1st July 2005 @ 08:56:41 AM AEST
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Dearest Venkat, this left me with such a feeling of tranquillity...I am almost begging for more!! I love this!!
Hugs
Jenni |
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Re: The Land of Dreams
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 1st July 2005 @ 08:59:16 AM AEST
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My dearest friend,
I don't find this to be dark at all. I find it to be an excellent form of expression of the soul and its journey.The walk to enlightenment is never full of light, we must be brave and see the dark also, but allow the LIGHT to win. The power in the rays is evident that your journeying towards the Light, and may you find the peace you search for. You are a wise man. Allow the Light of love to guide you and the the journey not only be a part of your dreams, but an awakening to your reality. God bless dear friend, another written work of art which allows me to venture into the depths of your soul! Angel always...godspeed...joni |
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by Vampirequeen on
Friday, 1st July 2005 @ 12:43:12 PM AEST
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WOW
I bow to your magic with your writes.
I am speechless.
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by blowfish_jane on
Saturday, 2nd July 2005 @ 02:48:21 AM AEST
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Ohh yeas please do send the second chapter of this amazing poem. I'll have to agree with Jenni with this one. This left me wanting for more.
amazing write as always Venkat.
Jane xoxox |
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by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 3rd July 2005 @ 07:07:42 AM AEST
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i always know where to come to read beautifully written poetry my friend, and this one is excellent, it is a -one cannot write like this unless they have been there kind of poem, which makes it all the more powerful, all the more meaningful, this leaves me smelling those fragrant flowers! ...hope you and yours are having a great summer, big hugs n' love nessa
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by inoc on
Sunday, 3rd July 2005 @ 07:39:14 AM AEST
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Thanks Venkat for such a brilliant write and YES more is always ...not enough...you are
w o n d e r f u l !
coni |
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by Essentially9 on
Monday, 4th July 2005 @ 08:57:00 PM AEST
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| hopefully not your last. spendidly done. your ending is as wonder as they usually are, as are your beginnings. |
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 4th July 2005 @ 09:39:57 PM AEST
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*In awe*
Your pieces, so simply, transfer me to greater levels of realisation!
“Then I saw a huge ethereal shape of Lord
Formed out of countless stars over the void�
A teaching more valuable than its metaphoric significance...simply beautiful.
“When I was sleeping ashore of an ocean
Awoke in a dark hall of my heart cavern�
Yet, this line I adored the most…being able to relate to the latter.
There is always a lesson to be learnt within your spiritual muses, thank you for sharing this artwork.
And do post pt-II...we are all eager to view :)
-Snow White.
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Tuesday, 5th July 2005 @ 01:41:00 AM AEST
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You have such an amazing talent in writing that u leave the reader grasping for more. An outstanding and remarkable write. Nothing less to what I expected from the talented Venkat. Your brillance shines radinatlly through ur master pieces. Please do keep them coming for I am forever intrigued with what will be in the next chapter.
Hugs,
Dreamer |
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 5th July 2005 @ 02:08:01 PM AEST
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| This is my 1st read on your poems and i must say its the best 1st impression i've ever had and I am now an open admirer. Your writing power has mas made your comments on my poems cherished. |
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by SocialMisfit on
Sunday, 10th July 2005 @ 01:40:24 AM AEST
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well i always know were to go if i wana read an awsome poem dont i? lol venkat you r amazing your talent shines through your work and this is no exception this was amazing well done.
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by emystar on
Monday, 11th July 2005 @ 08:04:19 AM AEST
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Awesomely beautifull.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: The Land of Dreams
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by Arden on
Wednesday, 13th July 2005 @ 02:35:22 AM AEST
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its refreshing to read one of your poems that i understand easily.
i think this is my favorite from you now.
i love the way it read, though it was a tad bit too blunt at times.
i still love the story it told and the images that came to my minds eye.
beautiful. i hope to see more.
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Re: The Land of Dreams
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by lovingcritters on
Sunday, 17th July 2005 @ 01:39:54 AM AEST
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Oh Dear Venkat sir,
I had to step out for day or two and when I returned, I had to see if you had posted another of your masterpieces. Sure enough you did. Please proceed with Part !! I await anxiously!
This was so interesting Venkat..........you have wonderful dreams that's for sure
Warm love
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Re: The Land of Dreams
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by Elizabeth_Dandy on
Saturday, 23rd July 2005 @ 11:51:56 AM AEST
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Dear Venkat Sir!
I have the great distinction of being last to find you and to comment to your splendid work.
Moreover, I am indebted t you, you had the graciousness of commenting to my poem "
"
A short Prayer"
but I never reciprocated due to the fact that bereavement theraphy took a lot of my time and I stayed away from YPDC for quite a while.
So shamefully belatedly I thank you for your comment it meant a lot to me in my grief.
I noticed also while skimming though some comments that you too have had great loss.
Lost parents, I lost all I had in the "O beautiful month of September" - a consolation for other bereaved.
Yes, we are on a pilgrimage, and pilgrims must hurt. Must hurt.
But oh! what a light at the end of the journey.
Your work is splendid, thanks for sharing it with us.now finaly I know where to go
Blessings and consolation to you dear Venkat Sir
Elizabeth Dandy.
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by bobotheclown on
Tuesday, 26th July 2005 @ 01:46:49 AM AEST
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Somehow I missed this my dear Venkat, but
this was a wonderful poem filled with
beautiful, touching imagery and of course I
would love to read Part II... who wouldn't? Once again an awesome write!
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: The Land of Dreams
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by Elizabeth_Dandy on
Wednesday, 27th July 2005 @ 09:39:29 AM AEST
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Waiting anxiously for more Venkat Sir.
I have a lot to catch up with.
Seeing I have missed so much -
But PROVIDENCE takes care of every detail of our lives, provided also for me, at the right time, though belatedly, to have my share in the wealth iof rarest masterpieces.
Love and peace
Elizabeth
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by jonteD on
Tuesday, 2nd August 2005 @ 09:33:07 AM AEST
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| Great dream |
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Re: The Land of Dreams
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by Overstated on
Tuesday, 2nd August 2005 @ 07:17:09 PM AEST
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wow how do you write like this?!?! so well structured -so different to most poems on these boards... i can not even begin to look at this poem tonight i will keep coming back to seek my own meaning from this piece of work. i feel you should be proud of your efforts here and i do feel that you will always have something else to say that is the beauty of life - there is always one more flower to smell and write about.
feel free to comment on my work also at: http://www.your-poetry.com/modules.php?name=Your_Account&op=userinfo&username=overstated
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by Archie on
Friday, 5th August 2005 @ 05:26:42 AM AEST
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| This is good. Do you use the names of real Gods in your poems or make them up? |
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 24th August 2005 @ 10:22:46 AM AEST
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such is our quest in life and it is never ending, yet peace may come to those who seek it along the way.
This is a lovely piece. I truely hope you find what you are seeking and that it may include happiness.
I hope you continue to write, but if your journey leads you in another direction may my wishes follow you. |
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by MorningDove on
Thursday, 25th August 2005 @ 01:53:37 AM AEST
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What beauty in your dreams. To see the creator in the heavens stars would lead me to want to attain more knowledge as I suppose it lead you on a lifetime search. I do hope you stay with us, but if your search leads to other places, I do wish you the best. You shall certainly be missed, my honorable friend.
Smiles,
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 31st August 2005 @ 04:26:19 AM AEST
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O_o
Woah.. This is lovely; beyond comparison.
Such dreams must truly be breathtaking, judging
solely from this piece, which is astounding.
Deep and powerful write..
*Still in awe*
~KayT
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by thumper on
Monday, 19th September 2005 @ 01:34:23 AM AEST
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I wish I had dreams like this. lol This is beautiful. As always, you lift my soul and lighten my load with your words. What a great outlook you have on life, and it shines so greatly in your words. Thank you for being here.
Friend
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by Wachumiri on
Wednesday, 28th September 2005 @ 04:13:40 AM AEST
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I've not read anything from you in a long time, and I can see that I'm really missing a lot. I love the picture/image of sleeping beside the ocean, that's something I've always wanted to do.
You have my greatest praise, well done.
Take care.
David |
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by sarankrish on
Monday, 17th October 2005 @ 06:54:59 AM AEST
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Read your poem. Good work on it ...
Thanks.
sarankrish |
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by DreamPoetess on
Tuesday, 18th October 2005 @ 12:19:05 AM AEST
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Once many upon a time VenKat, (((( nice meeting you, thank you for commenting on my poetry as well. You do not know me, for I have just registered as a new member on 10-15-05, but let me say to you,)))) I sense a wonderful you, I have strolled along your many enlightening poems, and now I am so full of pleasure to be able to finally comment in words here, instead of speaking to you in the air, I can also share and show you who was giving you those 5 stars, and I wish I could give you more stars than numbers could be quoted and counted, for you are a very valued author of mine, and I have travel read within your dreamy land written, wonderfully capturing these valuable gems as they come off the press, a tear from reading and finally being able to say hello to you, a very heartfelt write indeed:>
Meagan
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by Karazoul on
Monday, 28th November 2005 @ 04:37:11 PM AEST
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| really good poem....you have a gift |
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by Buggsy on
Friday, 9th December 2005 @ 09:30:53 AM AEST
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| Wonderful! |
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by Bizzy on
Friday, 16th December 2005 @ 09:41:29 PM AEST
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Hello, Friend. I am so glad to get back to your poems. I see references that you may need to go a different direction. We would miss you.
You are a great poet. Your poems are read, rated, and receive more comments than any other that I know. I think The Land of Dreams is beautiful as all of your poems are.
I must read more of what you have written this year. Good wishes to you. Your old friend, Bizzy |
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by Hurretje on
Saturday, 25th February 2006 @ 02:12:59 PM AEST
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Dear friend,
You still master the ability to make fluid emotions out of your flowing words...
Thanks for sharing this beautiful poem!
Hugs,
Hur |
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by myheartsvoice on
Wednesday, 14th February 2007 @ 07:26:55 AM AEST
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Truly a most beautiful work, i enjoyed the aura from it.
myheartsvoice
thank you also kindly for your comment |
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by trueecho on
Thursday, 1st March 2007 @ 03:05:13 PM AEST
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very nice images in this..although ive never stepped foot on your soil i dream of india as well..starting with my interest in music
thanks
trueecho |
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by yangdantien on
Friday, 23rd March 2007 @ 12:29:40 AM AEST
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Ah fellow dreamer what a beautifully textured expression of soul. I am enriched upon reading and grateful that you posted.
Excellent
Namaste
Yangdantien |
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Friday, 23rd March 2007 @ 02:11:12 AM AEST
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Venkat my friend, it has been a while, yet I find my way venturing towards your glorious pages my dear friend.
I loved this the first time I read it and even more now re-reading it again. I'm a dreamer who so much believes in the land of dreams.
Beautifully written as is all your work~
Thanks for posting it.
love n hugs,
sue m |
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by Man_On_High on
Wednesday, 4th April 2007 @ 03:46:31 PM AEST
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reading your work is akin to reading transcripts of waking dreams;
lucid and laced with affinity for that, which we here
in the mortal realm, can barely grasp.
brilliant metaphor.. and just as well,
your headlong and uninterrupted composition-
very well written.. an absolute joy to read~
B
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by Necromant on
Saturday, 23rd June 2007 @ 10:10:20 PM AEST
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After all these years I see you haven't lost your poetic touch :)
Very glad to see somethings never change. Wonderful poem Venkat, always loved reading your poems. |
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by ammalu on
Tuesday, 13th November 2007 @ 09:59:49 PM AEST
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Sir,
Hates off to ur amazing imagination and beautiful narration with apt terms. Expect to read more& more such pieces.
--with regards
--ammalu |
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 5th December 2008 @ 04:30:20 PM AEST
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very beautiful poem.
-phil |
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 31st December 2008 @ 10:19:10 PM AEST
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| This is an awesome deep piece of writing! |
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 3rd January 2009 @ 02:24:08 AM AEST
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How very nice. A very flowing and beautiful poem about a life, with dreams. You have captured such with great imagery. Sorry, it took me this long to get around to reading your poetry. YPDC is a huge place and I am sure my journey is not yet over.
Take care and thank you for sharing.
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by unknown_utopia on
Thursday, 19th March 2009 @ 10:15:23 PM AEST
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| This flows oh so nicely... |
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