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To-Do-List
Contributed by
ebhollen
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Tuesday, 30th December 2008 @ 06:07:58 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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Last Night
Sat Alone
made a to-do-list for tuesday
Got Drunk
passed out on the bathroom floor
Woke Up
Looked at the to-do-list on the table
clean room
clean kitchen
move sams trailer
send rent check
STOP SUCKING AT LIFE
Copyright ©
ebhollen
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2008-12-30 18:07:58]
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Re: To-Do-List
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by anomalei on
Wednesday, 31st December 2008 @ 11:34:48 AM AEST
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i think some expansion and maybe more... something? imagery, etc... would've helped.
but! the short and sweet structure you have now, makes for an excellant idea, and i love it.
it's... realistic for some one who's come to the bottom of the bottle... so to speak.
great write.
*Jemma- |
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