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broken window
Contributed by
Hannah_Heaven
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Monday, 9th August 2004 @ 04:13:55 PM in AEST
Topic:
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thats the why it is
the way my life is
BROKEN
in a million tiny shattered pieces
left in the corner
swept away with the cold air
and suffocated into darkness and vivid dreams
this is the way my crimson heart is
now turning black
the centre drilled to the core and now im left hollow
i swallow and i feel the acid water trickling down my throat,burning what's left of my insides
my organs turning inside out and devouring themselves to survive
the way my life has devoured me
its turned my whole life unside out and left me to feed open my own flesh
im sulking and my dark cloud is striking me
once,twice,my skin tender and scarred
my world shattered like the windows
the darkness left to wander in
and inside me
i hold my broken window wide open letting the darkness devour my soul...
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Re: broken window
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by waos on
Monday, 9th August 2004 @ 04:19:47 PM AEST
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| That was good. I really liked the different pictures you created with your words, like the organs devouring themselves and your life devouring you to survive. Those were really good, and just really vivid to me. Thanks for posting it. |
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Re: broken window
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by Stew on
Monday, 9th August 2004 @ 04:54:00 PM AEST
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Re: broken window
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by Stew on
Monday, 9th August 2004 @ 04:54:40 PM AEST
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wow! that was an awesome poem. i like the line with the words "broken windows"....
love forever
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Re: broken window
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by Essentially9 on
Monday, 9th August 2004 @ 05:05:39 PM AEST
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| great write. |
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Re: broken window
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by zenmind on
Monday, 9th August 2004 @ 05:29:06 PM AEST
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Nice description and imagery. I think everyone can relate to that feeling.
Be True,
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Re: broken window
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Tuesday, 10th August 2004 @ 06:24:07 AM AEST
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| Beautifully written, the startling images, gripping emotions, excellent poem. |
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