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A Sight So Lucid
Contributed by
kratur
on
Saturday, 29th January 2005 @ 03:25:29 AM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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My eyes drool and my face hurts from all this sorrow
It tastes like metal in my mouth right now but I know itll all be over tomorrow
I pulled the trigger but I smelled no smoke and I heard no sound
And when I looked about there was no hollow shell on the ground
Beethoven performing for Elise at the twilight of dawn
I cleared the dials and sat up with a yawn
I am always quite lonely and I really want an excuse to end it all
But every now and then I see Gods incredible handwriting on the wall
Jesus bought me with a pricethey say thats what He died for
But I know that He only did it so I would become His whore
I never loved God and I never cared if my name was on heavens list
So I bled Jesus out of me by opening up my weeping wrists
Beethoven performing for Elise at the twilight of dawn
I cleared the dials and sat up with a yawn
Sometimes the sky is blank, so I dig in the earth in search of the light
And Im still in a dream when I wake up in the middle of the night
I swallowed the big pills and I swallowed the little ones too
Right now I would eat a bomb just to see what it would do
If I do not succeed with this, I will just try it again
But no matter what, I will write no note even though I die holding a pen
Beethoven performing for Elise at the twilight of dawn
I cleared the dials and sat up with a yawn
Only this time I still heard Beethovens majestic hand gliding the keys
When I examined the machine, I saw something that made hell freeze
Though the music did play, the cord was dead and trailing off to nowhere like the great Nile
And my love, thats when I understood that I had been dead the whole while
Copyright ©
kratur
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2005-01-29 03:25:29]
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Re: A Sight So Lucid
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by EternalNight4x on
Saturday, 29th January 2005 @ 11:44:05 AM AEST
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| excellent write, very descriptive. Well expressed keep it up |
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Re: A Sight So Lucid
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by deadheadpoet on
Saturday, 29th January 2005 @ 12:50:02 PM AEST
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Kratur that was a very intense write. I liked it.
Especially the lines:"Sometimes the sky is blank, so I dig in the earth in search of the light" Loved that. Much peace to you, Laura |
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Re: A Sight So Lucid
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by Alina on
Friday, 4th February 2005 @ 10:34:16 PM AEST
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This was a breathtaking piece!! It has left me speechless. You seem truly talented, keep up the WONDERFUL writes!!
ALINA |
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Re: A Sight So Lucid
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by LevyMetal on
Thursday, 17th February 2005 @ 11:53:55 AM AEST
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| Beautiful! The story of my life. It was creative in its writing and struck many different emotions-well done! |
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Re: A Sight So Lucid
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by zenmind on
Saturday, 19th February 2005 @ 04:43:33 PM AEST
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You're a talented writer. Great images, great description, you express yourself very fluidly.
My eyes drool and my face hurts from all this sorrow
I love, love, love this line.
But I know that He only did it so I would become His whore
I like this line too. It made me laugh. You seem to have some issues with Christianity, which isn't a bad thing. I've noticed this come up in other poems of yours.
Once again, great poem.
Be True,
zenmind |
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