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untitled
Contributed by
cooley1818
on
Sunday, 31st July 2005 @ 01:00:31 AM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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Im caught up
im stretched to thin
im desprate for a way
im destin to win
the pain will build
the trouble will amount
the tables will turn
times ran out
im chasing a dream
im saving all might
im wasting away
im lost in the night
the story is folding
the plots ran dry
the chaos is binding
the tears become shy
its posting the feelings that i never had
its forcing this pain
thats making me sad
tonights the last
youll ever see me cry
tonights the first
these eyes will remain dry
im hopless in wondering
what i may come across
i've failed in everything
my souls become lost
Im to weak
im to weak to move
im to weak to share these memories
im to weak to express my mood
help me get a grasp
upon the days that fall ahead
im slipping from everything
im furthering away instead..
I'll search for a way
just a way to escape
to free myself from the life
and avoid making that mistake
so i'll speak my last words,
the words of relief
they will express my feelings
they will ingnore my beliefs..
"these stars will shine
they'll shine the light
that will guide my soul
beyond this sleepless night
goodbye cruel
its over........"
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2005-07-31 01:00:31]
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Re: untitled
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 31st July 2005 @ 01:04:35 AM AEST
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great write
good ryhme
keep writing
keep smiling
sweetstranger |
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Re: untitled
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by xxbreathlessx on
Sunday, 31st July 2005 @ 01:08:08 AM AEST
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| it fold very nicely! its like the story of your life unfolding before us. the end was brillant. you did such a great job with this write! |
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Re: untitled
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by pUnKa_RaCh on
Sunday, 31st July 2005 @ 01:08:29 AM AEST
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Full of painful emotions indeed.
Touching thoughts, hope the dreadful time does pass for you.
Oh its always good to give your stuff a title, you will get more reads. Name it something bold, something that will reel the reader in...just a hint for you.
This was a good piece anyway, great effort. |
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Re: untitled
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by Naughtygurl on
Sunday, 31st July 2005 @ 10:32:26 AM AEST
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kinda of sad but i loved it : ) i'm gonna read more of your poems, and its ok you couldnt think of a name becasue a poem this good doesnt really need a name , i still liked it : )
~~britt |
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Re: untitled
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by StrwBrryStrBrst0225 on
Tuesday, 2nd August 2005 @ 06:26:00 PM AEST
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| hey this is britt i suprisingly have two names from a while ago but i use the other one more , so damn that sux doesnt it .. ttyl by the way i still loved this poem |
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Re: untitled
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by Overstated on
Tuesday, 2nd August 2005 @ 06:37:22 PM AEST
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| a powerful piece that demands reading over and over again superb! |
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Re: untitled
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by emystar on
Monday, 1st August 2011 @ 02:02:58 AM AEST
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| your words stand on their own. ASwesome |
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