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Our Final Goodbye
Contributed by
cooley1818
on
Wednesday, 28th December 2005 @ 06:15:38 AM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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Promise me one thing
That you will not cry
As tomorrow fades to darkness
As I say my final goodbye
Cherish these memories
That you and I have shared
Always remember these dieing words
And never forget just how much I cared
I wish things could be different
But im afraid they cannot
I trusted u with my life
But I see that u gave up
I cannot handle
This heart to break again
The pain was just too real
Its something I couldn't relive
So see these as the last words
That will ever come from me
But keep them in your heart
And just one-day maybe u will see
See just how much pain
And how much pressure, it is just to bare
See how many times your heart can break
And where it begins to tare
Its just, things aint getting easier
Theyre only getting worse
I have to let go
I have to end this verse
So when ever you are feeling lonely
When ever you get scared
Just look up to the stars
And once again our hearts will pair
So don't take this hard
Just please remember this line
There always has to be an ending
To everyones final goodbye......
Copyright ©
cooley1818
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2005-12-28 06:15:38]
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Re: Our Final Goodbye
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 28th December 2005 @ 09:59:11 AM AEST
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I like the thoughts behind this and the content, however a bit of work needed to smooth out the flow in some of the lines.
Keep up the emotional aspect of your writing, it shines through well! |
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Re: Our Final Goodbye
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by Jazzy on
Wednesday, 28th December 2005 @ 02:22:47 PM AEST
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| I absolutely love this poem ... I can relate to it so deeply and I appreciate your talent ..KEEP IT UP... |
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Re: Our Final Goodbye
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by Poetic_Influence on
Wednesday, 28th December 2005 @ 03:57:43 PM AEST
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| GJ |
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Re: Our Final Goodbye
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by lostrelic on
Wednesday, 28th December 2005 @ 05:07:24 PM AEST
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very nice write
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