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betrayal outta control
Contributed by
hetlerkh
on
Friday, 25th September 2009 @ 01:26:38 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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betrayal is going far outta control my own hands are struggling ma throat my body is fighting ma own soul my lungs are chocking my own heart in my back your knife left a hole
what happened ...how did it happen i wined for a chance ......he gave me three i throwed those away ... i was so dump ...i get in dumpiness the highest digree
i wanna hang ma self to the closest tree i wanna drown ma self in the deepest sea its nobody's fault its me ! i betrayed ma own self .... now i gotta collect my heart debris
would i have one more shot ? this time i wont second guess i wont think twice this time it will be a success i wont lose mt confidence this time am changing this mess
whatever the consequences are gonna be whatever is the fee i agree just let me feel that am free
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2009-09-25 01:26:38] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: betrayal outta control
(User Rating: 1 ) by elle on
Friday, 25th September 2009 @ 07:15:28 AM AEST (User
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Hi Dude,
I say two thumbs up ( this is very good) for the impact of emotion you've given the page.
The most powerful statement you've made here
"it's nobody's fault it's me !"
I must applaud this most intimate & personal reflection. Everywhere, there is someone
or something to blame for our pain. Mostly, we choose.
Also, I feel your rhyming structure & style are maturing. . . !
Take care. elle :)
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