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Speak
Contributed by
drone
on
Tuesday, 10th June 2025 @ 02:39:14 AM in AEST
Topic:
spiritual
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When one Speaks
One creates Vibrational Word's
But When one Speaks
From your Heart
One creates Waves
That carries The vibrations
Into the field
That morphs
Into what
We sometimes find
Hard to Believe
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drone
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2025-06-10 02:39:14]
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Re: Speak
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by SuicidalSon on
Sunday, 10th May 2015 @ 06:50:06 AM AEST
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The lord of your life just might not be true
Unless the lord of your life is the same one as you. |
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Re: Speak
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by Invierno on
Sunday, 10th May 2015 @ 08:05:31 AM AEST
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Very cool poem here. I was going to pass over the read due to the title, but then the F.M. got me piqued.
Then the poem....the first thing to become apparent was a masterful flow scheme, very nice....like a horse on a lazy canter in a dawn field.......with super fine sound detection....birds waking up....hoofs in a steady beat of power...all mixed just so.
Content- a few I stopped and reread.
"no need to adore You." One can be grateful to, and love even, but the scripted falsetto of organized faith is exactly what kept me from God for 4.9 out 5.2 decades. Great point!
"You don't want subservient,
followers who bow down.
But like us to be more,
self-aware and kind." A reaffirmation of above.
I give you high marks here, You Who Love Christ. Lest I sound gushy, I would note a final edit never hurts, my friend.
"Cuz then I never..." Really? 'Cuz'? Don't be lazy...if 'because' doesn't fit for flow or syntax, then look at the entire stanza, rework the arrangement and find a word in flippin English that makes it work....you feel me, Cuz?
"there's non like You." I know you meant 'none', but 'non' means 'No' in Latin....surely you didn't mean that, no? I know you didn't. Really. Yes? Noh?
I'm playing now....I like this and you did a damn good job.
Invierno
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Re: Speak
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by Lionel on
Monday, 11th May 2015 @ 09:20:32 PM AEST
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| Well, my Lord is somewhat differant than your's, but your poem was very interesting. |
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