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Beautiful Soul
Contributed by
blknwht
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Friday, 21st August 2015 @ 03:31:47 PM in AEST
Topic:
FriendshipPoetry
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I've never met such a Beautiful soul One that's quite like yours It's something that hasn't gone un-noticed It's truly something to adore
For you are very softly spoken A gentle heart I can see A loving mother to her son Your most-likely out of my league
Your hair is long and beautiful Eyes are Ocean Blue I'm really hoping that when we get out of here That one day I can see you
Not for what you may be thinking For that is just not my style I just think we would make good friends A friendship lasting for a long while
It's really crazy that I'm even writing you For normally I'm not this brave But ever since I lay-ed my eyes on you My mind has been dancing in a daze
I know I have a lot to work on And I'm sure that you do too But I'm confident nothing is impossible Our kids make that statement true
So let me say it one more time I like the person that I see My hope is I made a good impression To where you also like me
If friendship is your true desire Someone to walk with through the storms Then I would be a perfect fit I would never make you mourn
But if it's not, then that's okay I'm glad to of known you this short while Just remember your a beautiful soul And remember to always smile
Copyright ©
blknwht
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2015-08-21 15:31:47] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Beautiful Soul
(User Rating: 1 ) by softerware on
Friday, 21st August 2015 @ 05:35:20 PM AEST (User
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Makes me think of someone with a checkered past reaching out to find a road back.
A jail or prison background comes to mind in the statement: "I know that I have a lot to work on and I'm sure that you do too."
I'm sure I read too much into it, but that is just my history speaking. I know the sounds; having fallen for them myself a time or two.
Keep writing and working on your craft. It is a tool that will get you where you want to go without collateral damage to others.
softerware
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Re: Beautiful Soul
(User Rating: 1 ) by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Friday, 21st August 2015 @ 06:49:47 PM AEST (User
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This reminded me of something I have always thought throughout my life - that some people come into your life for a long time, while other make only a fleeting acquaintance.
All add to our lives in some degree by their presence.
Nice work
Steve |
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Re: Beautiful Soul
(User Rating: 1 ) by The_Unknown on
Saturday, 22nd August 2015 @ 01:06:54 AM AEST (User
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A very lovely poem for this person.
I, too, have met people I just long to be friends with... Whether a friendship forever, for a time, or a short moment it never ceases to leave an impact.
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Re: Beautiful Soul
(User Rating: 1 ) by Archie on
Saturday, 22nd August 2015 @ 01:11:17 AM AEST (User
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I like the down to earth style of your poem. I was not disappointed to read this one as it was pure in nature. That is the best kind of LOVE. |
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Re: Beautiful Soul
(User Rating: 1 ) by HellsLibrarian on
Saturday, 22nd August 2015 @ 09:27:51 AM AEST (User
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I liked your poem; it made me think of second chances. |
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Re: Beautiful Soul
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Sunday, 23rd August 2015 @ 12:33:14 AM AEST (User
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Well, this feels so real
real is this thing a writer experiences
that makes writing about it easy
and pure and explains things
that stick out of the collective noise
The eyes are always darting around
looking for something well done
something real
the mind is controlling the eyes
and the heart
is saying yes or no
yes or no
I like this a lot because it
feels real, I already said that much
Well, it's good!
Quite.
Peace!
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