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Circus Of The Sword
Contributed by
ingeniusidiot
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Tuesday, 19th March 2019 @ 03:03:41 PM in AEST
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Of youth at heart eyes shine bright
The illumination blinds outside line of sight
Obsessive pessimism is an optimistic truth
With burdened soul the hand is never slight
For the pain to the beholder brings forth bearer*s will*s might
Pretentious eyes to clocks and mirrors run
Under midnight moon or midday sun
Being soothsayers of sort they are terrible liars
As tongues strike swift with words never to be undone
Those once bright eyes now are dark like a barrel of a loaded gun
Some words cut deeper than double edged steel
As others reach within; touching the heart they do heal
While showing a serene visage a war wages beneath
Unlike the blood from an old wound; words and thoughts do not congeal
All the while heaven or hell awaits the conclusion of the final meal
With mortality*s wisdom gained by the passage of fleeting youth
By a tolling bell eyes slowly shut and time expires
Ending the reign of the sword returning forevermore to its sheath
2019
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Re: Circus Of The Sword
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by JamesStockdale on
Tuesday, 19th March 2019 @ 03:37:07 PM AEST
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| Very powerful write. All stanzas were great with the intro and last one striking my fancy the most. Awesome poem. Factual as well! |
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Re: Circus Of The Sword
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by softerware on
Wednesday, 20th March 2019 @ 06:10:04 PM AEST
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A cradle to grave tale of optimism tempered by experience. My favorite line is EYES NOW ARE DARK LIKE THE BARREL OF A LOADED GUN.
Yikes...what a chillin visual!
We gain our wisdom far too late to use it.
There is a splendid message here as I read this for the second time:
We long to be older when we are young..and long to be younger when we are old.
Your story demonstrates that our malcontent is of our own making! (and what we make; we can un-make!). So dear YPDC readers, what are we waiting for?
softerware
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Re: Circus Of The Sword
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by Rakerman1999 on
Thursday, 21st March 2019 @ 11:52:45 PM AEST
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I really liked this. You have so many truly poetic phrases here that caught my attention big time! Don/'/t mind me if I steal a few. Lol
Excellent writing once again.
Very well done
Oh barkeep!!
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Re: Circus Of The Sword
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by Invierno on
Monday, 6th May 2019 @ 06:25:01 AM AEST
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Rich, I/'/m sorry I haven/'/t read your poetry. You consistently comment on mine. I wish I had done so sooner.
I can discern a deep current of intelligence and find in you a kindred soul seeking answers to questions most people don/'/t bother with because their faith neatly provides the answers.
"Obsessive pessimism is an optimistic truth". I REALLY like this line. I am, in philosophical terms, a pessimist. But, the reality is that I am a Realist. Sounds like you may be also.
There is nothing wrong with seeing life as it truly is, with all the window dressing removed.
Thank you for sharing your thoughts and words. Most recent poem is 03.21? Man, get on the stick and pump something out!
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