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DOWN BY THE OLD MILL

Contributed by lovingcritters on Monday, 26th January 2004 @ 04:12:09 PM in AEST
Topic: LostLove





I was brand new, you were mean!
I cried real tears, when I was sixteen.
Very insecure, you sensed my weakness.
My heart of kindness, recognized
yours of crudeness!

But, we were young, joyful, teenagers unafraid!
I should have gone home, but waited
instead, and stayed!
The letter sweater from another,
put you in a rage.
If only I'd known then, prepared was your cage!

Steady as we went, no one else allowed!
Controlling, no comforting words,
proud, unvowed.
I was always there waiting for you,
day one, day two.....
My love drew, to ensue, pursue, my debut.

Ready as we go, there on the football field.
Compromising for you always,
my lame heart's yield.
A strong bold kiss, brave, secure, not missed.
I was barely sixteen, a handsome young man
how could I resist?

Church goer, prim, proper, great show!
I loved you so much, but you had places to go!
We were so young,
and so much in love, I thought?
Dancing teenagers, unafraid, hearts untaught.

The night you graduated, I was there
always there.
Your ring you asked back, the coolness,
I felt from somewhere.
"I want you to have fun your last year
of high school!"
Another one of your rules, without
emotion, so cruel!

But i was a young teenager barely sixteen then.
I'd given you my whole heart, 'twas not just a lend.
When you reached for your ring, you failed to
see, attached to it was my heart,
sobbing, so comely!

But I was a young teenager who loved to dance.
No one would ever see my heart again,
never another chance.
Our parting was similiar to the way we had met.
Down by the old mill, you were mean, but I
was sixteen, and loved to dream,
it was so easy to forget!

Still dreaming along with a loving heart's song
Took me years to find out, that it was not me....
you'd strung me along.
Your first year of college it was you that
wanted to be free.
You left me down by the old mill,
heartless, dumped sweetly!

Created by
Cheri Cam LeBren
January 2004

"My first love,
do you ever forget
that new feeling in your heart?"





Copyright © lovingcritters ... [ 2004-01-26 16:12:09]
(Date/Time posted on site)





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Re: DOWN BY THE OLD MILL (User Rating: 1 )
by Necromant on Monday, 26th January 2004 @ 04:42:56 PM AEST
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Oh what a heart shattering poem! It's really sad! and bitter, Very good written! I loved it! Everyone here has loads of talent, lol the more I read the more I thhink my poems suck *Sigh* At least I can read your beautiful ones and forget mine :p
Anne :D


Re: DOWN BY THE OLD MILL (User Rating: 1 )
by Kie on Monday, 26th January 2004 @ 04:47:27 PM AEST
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I loved the trip down memory lane. Although parts were so sad (for the record he lost pure gold, when he let go of you! poor sap!) I found myself smiling because you have this form of expression that is so very rare. Awww, the old mill, perfect title..Kie


Re: DOWN BY THE OLD MILL (User Rating: 1 )
by norm on Monday, 26th January 2004 @ 05:44:51 PM AEST
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The critters lady's poetic sense is amazing..
---------------------------------------------
In every single true romance,
One or the other takes a chance,
The one who is stung will cry a lot
The one who's the stinger drew from the pot.

The next time around, the opposite be
The stung was the smartest, easy to see,
The new one is hurt, the armor goes on,
And each new romance could be a mean con.



Re: DOWN BY THE OLD MILL (User Rating: 1 )
by shelby on Monday, 26th January 2004 @ 05:52:45 PM AEST
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bitter sweet conni your right we dont forget nomatter how the time flies away on us this was awesome
michelle


Re: DOWN BY THE OLD MILL (User Rating: 1 )
by LOWMAN613 on Monday, 26th January 2004 @ 06:13:54 PM AEST
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Touching & so beautiful this was! Our first love sticks with us,Great write! Christina


Re: DOWN BY THE OLD MILL (User Rating: 1 )
by Cobalt on Friday, 20th February 2004 @ 09:33:26 PM AEST
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*Winces*
Ouch... I've done just that... IN that process I created a horrible person... So bad of me...
I can't fix it though. It's too late. I tried but I failed... This one was like a slap in the face to me...




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