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safe haven
Contributed by
jaeann
on
Friday, 27th February 2004 @ 09:51:42 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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swing set rusted out in back flying ants on the side yard empty clothesline in the wind a single mother's life was hard a red car in the drive pea rock on the ground blanket full of dollies freedom beneath the tree was sound freshly cut mower grass a run around the block mosquitos came in swarms the key's under the rock a room full of yellow furniture a screen door hung in care kitty cat on a leash bumblebee come to his lair lip synching on the old victrola with a tin foil microphone dressed up to the nines some wild outfit on loan old cement slab for the stage hens and chicks in the front riding the three speed for hours goin' on a drama hunt wild garage sale hand me downs so many sizes too small rick rack sewn on the bottom hems curse of growing tall a pose in summer delight here one unhappy day there a blue dress began her day the men with the corsages, beware a vast expanse of memories amazingly more good than bad shoulda never left the place could of hidden all the sad the mama who once lived there is gone now so's the little girl from that lane all that's left is a shell of a house the keeper of the pain
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Re: safe haven
(User Rating: 1 ) by Kie on
Friday, 27th February 2004 @ 10:47:43 PM AEST (User
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Oh the pictures you paint in the mind. It was like watching a movie or slides of ones life. A very unique, one of a kind poem. Kie |
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Re: safe haven
(User Rating: 1 ) by lil_angel on
Friday, 27th February 2004 @ 11:31:08 PM AEST (User
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This is really good! |
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Re: safe haven
(User Rating: 1 ) by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 28th February 2004 @ 12:25:24 AM AEST (User
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what a powerful poem, jaeann, im drowning in memories of another house/time/place i knew, this poem a fragile glimpse of how precarious life really is, simply beautiful.... hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: safe haven
(User Rating: 1 ) by Ilhar on
Saturday, 28th February 2004 @ 08:22:14 AM AEST (User
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talented is the only word
excellent
Shari |
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Re: safe haven
(User Rating: 1 ) by lovingcritters on
Monday, 1st March 2004 @ 07:19:17 AM AEST (User
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BRAVO!BRAVO!BRAVO! And the house of pain.......a great line little pear lady.....have been out f town. Just got back. I loved this poem.......smooth, memories so fine....at times a look back at our childhood.....divine.
You had a marvelous imaginations then, and that helped you survive......it's helping you do the same thing now!
Loved it....do it again please
love you
consue |
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Re: safe haven
(User Rating: 1 ) by scorpion on
Friday, 2nd April 2004 @ 10:06:39 AM AEST (User
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I love the images and the memories that your poem reminds me of when I was a child. Keep on writing you are very good. |
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