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Under the knife
Contributed by
neglected1
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Tuesday, 23rd March 2004 @ 06:43:13 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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Unconsciousness turns towards fatal being
The rewards of living yet pass by as quickly as the
Hand flies by
Staggering legs filled with nauseous feelings
Counting back from ten-nine-eight-sevvenn-si..
Relaxing to the white glare eventually fades away
Hoping to prevail this mind
Day by day living in this much pain
Soon waking up to the three-two-one
Revealing worries and un-excitement
Hearing nothing but an annoying beeping
And retina has not stated its purpose
Feeling absolutely worthless
Gazing at the hurtful ending
Keen that this pain would subside me in the unknown space
Watching tears roll down my face
In some what commemoration from when i was young.. Oh how great it would be to be young again
But then there would still be bruises and scraped knees
What's so great about the living body
Overwhelmed with hurtful situations and stubborn
Aspect towards things you cant conquer
Living by the rules that have no answers
This is the real world
Real life
Real situations
Painful but true
But soon my body will heal
Waiting to see the hand fly by faster than i have ever seen before
And eventually letting the sounds 1-10 come out
Copyright ©
neglected1
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2004-03-23 18:43:13]
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Re: Under the knife
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by Overstated on
Tuesday, 23rd March 2004 @ 06:52:29 PM AEST
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| wow very powerful - i found this really thought provoking - which all good poetry should be! ---os |
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Re: Under the knife
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 23rd March 2004 @ 08:39:52 PM AEST
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the test of a good poem is to read it out loud.
the power and emotion of this piece really comes out, you are very talented indeed.
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Re: Under the knife
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by SkYYBLu on
Wednesday, 24th March 2004 @ 10:46:57 PM AEST
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Oh wow...you bring to life stored feelings in our minds through your poetry, I loved this...amazing...keep it up!
~Paige |
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Re: Under the knife
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by Cynthia on
Saturday, 27th March 2004 @ 11:49:18 PM AEST
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| Great job explianing this. It reminds me of what I went through a few times. *S* Cynthia |
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