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Weaver of Memories
Contributed by
Vitreous_Soul
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Monday, 14th June 2004 @ 11:46:25 PM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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She doth emerge, past arcadia doors Both eyes converge, a racing heart implores Candescent surge, her perfection outpours To splendour verge, transcending nevermores
Fluently flows her flaxen hair Graciously glows; golden, aglare Sensuous shone sapphire eyes Shimmering stones stare; mesmerize
Diatonic, angel's voice harmonic Cosmogonic, shifts my world tectonic Dispels chthonic, liquored kiss as tonic Thought synchronic, brings life this mnemonic
Ravishing red, her ruby lips So sweetly said; sonant eclipse Flawless figure, a fulgent frame Virile vigor, vision aflame
Curtained by moonlight, we at last embraced With kiss I imbibe, lips of wine I taste Mere seconds clicked, all despond was erased The fires of coalescence emplaced Thus my soul was by her spirit enlaced
Serene within her silken pallor My thoughts of old are met with valour Creator of my retrospection Tinctures my ev'ry recollection
Our mem'ries forged serve as mementos From days gone past she pens my cento
In each other's arms, in love's defense... Our past, present and future reminiscence
Copyright ©
Vitreous_Soul
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2004-06-14 23:46:25] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Weaver of Memories
(User Rating: 1 ) by emystar on
Tuesday, 15th June 2004 @ 12:15:48 AM AEST (User
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A very deep, powerfull write aand especially the last two verses.
Great write.luv, huggs,
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Re: Weaver of Memories
(User Rating: 1 ) by desertwispers on
Tuesday, 15th June 2004 @ 01:43:30 AM AEST (User
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powerful
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Re: Weaver of Memories
(User Rating: 1 ) by Rakerman1999 on
Tuesday, 15th June 2004 @ 05:21:01 AM AEST (User
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If that doesnt melt her heart Dan, nothing will ;o). Beautifully written from the pen of a master poet and to a fine young lady.
Very well done
Barkeep.. a bottle of your finest for my young friends
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Re: Weaver of Memories
(User Rating: 1 ) by Black13 on
Tuesday, 15th June 2004 @ 08:35:56 AM AEST (User
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Saw this last night.
Beautiful write from the heart Dan. Nicely done.
:D
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Re: Weaver of Memories
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 15th June 2004 @ 08:45:01 AM AEST (User
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I've read this three times already, and I swear that If I hadn't read you before, I'd think you were showing off!
"Ravishing red, her ruby lips
So sweetly said; sonant eclipse
Flawless figure, a fulgent frame
Virile vigor, vision aflame"
Gah! Taketh thine thousandth comment, thou swarthiest demon of pen! |
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Re: Weaver of Memories
(User Rating: 1 ) by Stitch on
Tuesday, 15th June 2004 @ 08:46:55 AM AEST (User
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*BIG smile*
Just so happy for you, Dan.
Another beautiful write. I just love the way you string words.
Stitch |
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Re: Weaver of Memories
(User Rating: 1 ) by blueheart on
Tuesday, 15th June 2004 @ 09:48:46 AM AEST (User
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Wonderfully romantic. She will love it. |
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Re: Weaver of Memories
(User Rating: 1 ) by brigitte7735 on
Tuesday, 15th June 2004 @ 10:12:34 AM AEST (User
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If you could take every thought, every passing wish of what i wanted, what i had imagined for myself, in my wildest dreams what i had longed for....I'm so shaking right now.
You are the greatest, most talented person I have ever met. Like i have said , my Tarantino, Bob Dylan and Henry Miller. This is the most glorious thing anyone has ever done for me and I dont know how i can ever thank you ( though that schoolgirl outfit does drift back to mind ).
The words of this poem have been echoing in my mind all night Im just in awe that someone actually feels this way about me.
Love you, always and forever
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Re: Weaver of Memories
(User Rating: 1 ) by Silent-No-More on
Tuesday, 15th June 2004 @ 11:18:37 AM AEST (User
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The heart of a poet! What every woman dreams of... but few will ever obtain. *sigh*
Masterful as always... but this time, so incredible laced with affection. I barely know what to say! It makes "I love you" seem... well... kind of pathetic and rather understated.
Wallowing in the knowledge that romance hasn't died-
SNM
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Re: Weaver of Memories
(User Rating: 1 ) by Kie on
Tuesday, 15th June 2004 @ 01:16:52 PM AEST (User
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This is a lovely dedication.
It is beautiful from start to finish and very impressive.
Excellent title as well.
I wish you both the best that life has to offer.
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Re: Weaver of Memories
(User Rating: 1 ) by Archie on
Tuesday, 15th June 2004 @ 05:05:02 PM AEST (User
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This is a great poem. Neptunes_First recomended it and I am thoroughly impressed. |
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Re: Weaver of Memories
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 15th June 2004 @ 06:12:45 PM AEST (User
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These words are so exquisitely beautiful. If I wasn't so old I would have to vie for your heart. She is a lucky girl.
Rita |
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Re: Weaver of Memories
(User Rating: 1 ) by hooray_its_jen on
Wednesday, 16th June 2004 @ 04:19:48 PM AEST (User
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Vanessa is a very lucky girl to have someone like you! It is so sweet when people dedicate their poetry....and it's even better when the poem is this good! I'm sure she's smiling! Very nice write, thank you so much for sharing it with us. I enjoyed it a lot!
Blessings
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Re: Weaver of Memories
(User Rating: 1 ) by Fionndruinne on
Monday, 21st June 2004 @ 06:38:24 PM AEST (User
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I think you must have created the English language, with the effortless way you use it. Superlative!
Serene within her silken pallor
My thoughts of old are met with valour
Creator of my retrospection
Tinctures my ev'ry recollection
I especially like this stanza. Brilliant work.
*doffs cap*
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Re: Weaver of Memories
(User Rating: 1 ) by Eve on
Wednesday, 23rd June 2004 @ 11:49:55 AM AEST (User
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Wow, VS... soon even I'll need a dictionary.
In all seriousness, though, this piece was, is, and will ever be incredible. Poetry requires inspiration for a more depthy view of emotion, and it looks like you've got quite a bit of inspiration. ^^
Among your best, truly.
Keep writing or swallow a box of thumbtacks,
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Re: Weaver of Memories
(User Rating: 1 ) by forever_lonely on
Saturday, 26th June 2004 @ 06:58:08 PM AEST (User
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My good friend.. simple words cannot express the aura that this fine piece of poetry carries with it, with each passing line i found myself deeper and deeper within your words
As time goes by, if find there is not a second where i am not in awe of the beauty that screams from your pen, born from the soul inside you that is pregnant with what one could only call a talent that should never be and will never be forgotten, you are a genius, you are a romantic, you are a piece of art and your never ending talents are the colours.
Luke |
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Re: Weaver of Memories
(User Rating: 1 ) by xSlashXPrettyXSkinx on
Monday, 28th June 2004 @ 05:39:13 PM AEST (User
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Dan... *in awe*
*no words* I try to speak but nothing comes.
This was.... yeah.
She is lucky.
Lindsey |
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