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What i let you see
Contributed by
savedbydeath
on
Monday, 21st February 2005 @ 05:50:09 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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my eyes are blood shot
i can't believe my thoughts
i don't want to
but they're there because of you
you made me feel alive
and now i feel dead
from all things you've said
i can't survive
i don't feel my heart beating
my wrists are trying to heal
nothing is feeling real
my head is pounding
if you believed all my thoughts are real
i'd show you how it feels
but i won't let myself
i could never let myself
if you could see
what i see
if you could dream
what i dream
you can only see
all the things that i show
all things i let you know
still you cannot see
my eyes are crying blood
my life is wounded
my soul is never to be healed
my memories are haunted
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2005-02-21 17:50:09]
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Re: What i let you see
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by fielding88 on
Monday, 21st February 2005 @ 06:08:59 PM AEST
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| nice write here. if u wanted suggestions on the title, i like the one thats up there now, but u culd use things that relate to, like, censoring yourself in terms of what u let others know about u. but neways i like the topic u decided to write on and enjoyed the way u dealt with it. the whole thing just seemed to flow, good job. |
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Re: What i let you see
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by Stonedraider23 on
Monday, 21st February 2005 @ 06:59:30 PM AEST
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| great write the title fits it or even haunted memories would be purdy any way great write sexy |
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