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Black eyes
Contributed by
so_fetch
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Wednesday, 25th May 2005 @ 07:31:51 PM in AEST
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Black-eyed *****, seeing red
Hate filled thoughts inside her head
Soul lost in a sea of rage
Trapped inside a burning cage
Nails as sharp as razor blades
For harming others is why theyre made
Hardened heart as cold as stone
Ears sharp to hear tortured groans
Hair flowing back as black as night
Teeth so white they could bring light
Enjoys the sound of a broken heart
Loves to see the tear flow start
Holds up a match to her already scarred wrist
The smoke rises in a beautiful twist
Can hold it there, forever with no sore
Since he killed himself she feels no more
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Re: Black eyes
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by Versigh on
Wednesday, 25th May 2005 @ 07:43:17 PM AEST
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| aw you tricked the robots! *gasp* anyways! Awesome rhymes! Loved it! |
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Re: Black eyes
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by hauntedscorp on
Wednesday, 25th May 2005 @ 07:44:05 PM AEST
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Nice, very nice poem here....Good job.
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Re: Black eyes
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by ElatedNBliss on
Thursday, 26th May 2005 @ 05:51:30 PM AEST
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| whatt's the title of the book that inspired u? from this poem it sounds interesting. liked your poem. really shows her point of view |
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Re: Black eyes
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by so_fetch on
Thursday, 26th May 2005 @ 06:05:29 PM AEST
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| The character its self is nothing like this, it is just based on her and I used my imagination to exaggerate lol but the book is called Blue Diary |
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Re: Black eyes
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by girltranscended on
Thursday, 26th May 2005 @ 06:08:47 PM AEST
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I liked this very much - great imagery. But I wonder about the feels no more part since it starts with such rage. "Trapped inside a burning cage" is my favorite line, very powerful.
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