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Morbid Thoughts
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
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Wednesday, 1st June 2005 @ 03:33:54 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Sharks circling, swimming in my lake
(don't know how much more of this I can take)
A silence so obscure you could drop a pin
the sun has set, please take me in
Too much company yet still lonely
as I sit here and weep thinking "If only..."
The violin plays its tragic song
tense situation, I'm trying to stay strong
A heart growing distant; yet still an echo
growing tension constricts airflow
I'm writing this with blurred eyes...no lies
mask stripped off, reveals a disguise
A warm embrace reaching out to touch...
hands fumbling, struggling to clutch
Clouds parting; sun fighting to breakthrough
today I'm all decked out in blue....
wearing my Yanks cap (just for you).
Copyright ©
hauntedscorp
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2005-06-01 15:33:54]
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Re: Morbid Thoughts
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by bethers_is_my_baby on
Wednesday, 1st June 2005 @ 05:18:34 PM AEST
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hey, i realy liked this one! :) its different but nice!! very well written :)
*~peace and love~* |
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Re: Morbid Thoughts
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by Essentially9 on
Wednesday, 1st June 2005 @ 09:00:08 PM AEST
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| lol you just had to ruin a good poem with happiness, jk. excellent poem scorp, i could easily see this sung. your third stanza reminded me of some of my poems. get some inspiration soon =] |
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Re: Morbid Thoughts
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by jyssvw22 on
Wednesday, 1st June 2005 @ 09:57:37 PM AEST
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| oh my..oh my....speachless....without speech....amazing |
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Re: Morbid Thoughts
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by jyssvw22 on
Wednesday, 1st June 2005 @ 09:58:33 PM AEST
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oh my..oh my....speachless....
without speech....amazing
i know it will get better for you scorp
lets go yankees..lol... |
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Re: Morbid Thoughts
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by sride686 on
Thursday, 2nd June 2005 @ 11:12:08 AM AEST
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| This was a very good write and it had a great flow. You write so well and they are always much enjoyed whether they are happy or sad. Bye for now….Steve |
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Re: Morbid Thoughts
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by sweetangeluk on
Thursday, 2nd June 2005 @ 01:31:13 PM AEST
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Excellent write
Love Angelxxx |
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Re: Morbid Thoughts
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by DorianChambers on
Thursday, 2nd June 2005 @ 03:43:54 PM AEST
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awwww this is sad 2 hear u weeping lovely
peice of sad poetry, (((((scorp)))))
Benedetto John Papa Sr.
aka. Dorian Chambers |
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Re: Morbid Thoughts
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by Channing on
Monday, 12th December 2005 @ 08:58:29 PM AEST
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| The thoughts dont seem to morbid, but its still a very good poem. Keep up the good work! |
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