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masochist
Contributed by
bohemian_With_A_pen
on
Sunday, 31st July 2005 @ 01:05:16 AM in AEST
Topic:
self-harmpoetry
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I love it when you
Do this to me
Cut my skin and watch me
Bleed
Pure rage and spirits colliding
Dreams and nightmares multiplying
Kill me slowly
Make it holy
Slice away my pain
Kiss my wounds
Make me swoon
Just to beat me down again
Drowning yourself in my screams
Youre certainly the guy of my dreams
My masochistic fantasies
Killing my self with this brutal disease
The most beautiful from of suicide
A drop of blood for every wail cried
Suppressing a giggle at my crimson delight
Laughter muffled by tears all through the night
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Re: masochist
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by Essentially9 on
Sunday, 31st July 2005 @ 01:37:02 AM AEST
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| excellent piece of writing you have here. this was creative and original. each stanza i would choose for being amazing in its own respects. the first one certainly set the tone. your second one was excellent, especially with the twist. the third was so creative, and the rhymes were also well done. the fourth had an excellent concept that really pulled the piece together. |
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Re: masochist
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by pUnKa_RaCh on
Sunday, 31st July 2005 @ 01:39:08 AM AEST
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What a dark conveyance of one's pain....
Very honest and real indeed...filled with terrorised emotion.
I hope this sad time does subside. For I know what it's like, I used to cut myself too.
Hope to you |
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Re: masochist
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by cuddlytiger17 on
Sunday, 31st July 2005 @ 01:11:00 PM AEST
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A very well written poem, though the subject
is quite depressing. That is life though. The
rhyme and rhythm heighten the frantic feel to
the poem. Good job. |
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Re: masochist
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by xxbreathlessx on
Sunday, 31st July 2005 @ 02:18:30 PM AEST
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| very,very creepy but i have to say...it is very,very well written as well... |
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Re: masochist
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by Man_On_High on
Thursday, 11th August 2005 @ 12:27:01 AM AEST
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..an excellent piece indeed..
I absolutely love how you've marshalled
the ideas..
most riveting...and very telling-
a true confessional..
and that third verse grabbed me 'round the neck,
shook me a bit.. and threw me to the ground!
Great diction..
I loved it!
(perhaps I'm a masochist..lol)
Billy
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