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His Hands Raped
Contributed by
xxbreathlessx
on
Tuesday, 24th January 2006 @ 09:55:44 PM in AEST
Topic:
Grief
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His hands, so rough
Slide against her cheek
She whimpers, she cries
He laughs and then speaks
This wont hurt, so please dont scream,
Unless you want me to tell the neighbors
What a sick girl youve been
She shakes her head
Hopeless and sad
Will this be the first experience youve had?
She nods and she shudders
At the thought of his hands
Up against her stomach, her thighs and
Then lands
where it hurts,
Inside and out.
She tries not to scream
as he teases and pouts,
come on, its ok
He tries to say
But the words come as
A blurred array
Of alcohol
And breath sweetener
and his teeth are decaying
hes ****** her now and
his spit is spraying
over her soft delicate skin.
It doesnt matter if he kills her
Because hes demolished her within.
When its over she begs
Just shoot me now
He backs away slowly
And wipes off his brow
Youre free to go
Stupid girl, go, Run!
She screams in frustration
And takes hold of the gun
You bastard! You ***hole!
She screamed out of control.
I dont have a reason to live anymore
And with a click and a bang she was dead on the floor
Just as the police were knocking on his door
Copyright ©
xxbreathlessx
... [
2006-01-24 21:55:44]
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Re: His Hands Raped
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by Petznick on
Tuesday, 24th January 2006 @ 11:13:47 PM AEST
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wow, unbelievable imagery in this piece. you've created two characters that are so realistic in your words even though they don't have names, great work
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Re: His Hands Raped
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by OzChick on
Wednesday, 25th January 2006 @ 01:05:41 AM AEST
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This is so powerful and extremely well written.
Very descriptive and emotional.
Bravo!
~Jenny~ |
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Re: His Hands Raped
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by Jenni_K on
Wednesday, 25th January 2006 @ 06:07:03 AM AEST
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Excellent piece!! Well written
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Re: His Hands Raped
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by JordonsBaby17 on
Wednesday, 25th January 2006 @ 11:21:03 AM AEST
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| wow. i almost cried! this is such a good poem! wow... |
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Re: His Hands Raped
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 25th January 2006 @ 12:17:11 PM AEST
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| Powerfully written. |
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Re: His Hands Raped
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by Poetic_Influence on
Wednesday, 25th January 2006 @ 01:57:41 PM AEST
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| nice write, but then eding shoudlnt have been like that, i would have liked it if she shot him instead of herself, because why let a man take u down |
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Re: His Hands Raped
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by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Monday, 30th January 2006 @ 07:26:20 PM AEST
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The whole idea of rape disgusts me, I have written about the same subject myself.
You have conveyed this vile crime in a very striking way
Steve |
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