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Seashore
Contributed by
Overstated
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Tuesday, 23rd March 2004 @ 06:48:02 PM in AEST
Topic:
LoveRemembered
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A Christmas tree on the floor,
I asked myself where this was going,
remembered the night where we promised
we were like land and sea always next to each other,
meeting at the seashore
Sometimes my knuckles got white,
told me that we were right,
I was scared I wanted to hide,
didn't believe in perfection,
didn't know I didn't need to try.
A Christmas tree left on the floor,
no one to pick it up from the hall,
an angel rests on the side,
she never fell from grace,
she never tumbled out of sight,
sometimes you remind me of the doll,
I want to wrap you up in cotton wool,
still present yet distant,
i can smell you your still here,
like a christmas tree left on the floor,
somewhere here on the seashore.
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Overstated
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2004-03-23 18:48:02]
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Re: Seashore
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by Remy on
Tuesday, 23rd March 2004 @ 07:15:18 PM AEST
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heh, sounds like a few memories all my own... groovey write! ;0)
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Re: Seashore
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by New_York_Chick on
Tuesday, 23rd March 2004 @ 07:28:21 PM AEST
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a truly great poem
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Re: Seashore
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by blueheart on
Tuesday, 23rd March 2004 @ 10:54:58 PM AEST
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| Rather dreamy, I liked it. Good poem. |
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Re: Seashore
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 19th May 2004 @ 03:26:19 AM AEST
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| This is an original analogy. I think that this makes this poem stand out and is worthy of a 5. I like seashores - well done, for turning one into something very meaningful, in a thought-provoking poem. |
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Re: Seashore
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by Aika on
Thursday, 3rd June 2004 @ 09:15:15 AM AEST
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| very lovely! indeed! i loved it, aika:-) |
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Re: Seashore
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by Jenni_K on
Sunday, 15th August 2004 @ 03:19:36 PM AEST
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I loved the analogy used here.....
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Re: Seashore
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by PumpkinPie on
Tuesday, 17th August 2004 @ 08:26:01 PM AEST
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Your poem actually brought tears to my eyes,I found this so sad to read.Of all your poems,this one is my favored one,the one my heart connects with the most,and the one that makes your talent shine as bright as a star.I truly found each verse flowing with grace and filled with uniqueness.Everything about this poem was perfect,truly beautiful piece you wrote here~
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