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could u see it
Contributed by
tractorbabe
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Wednesday, 2nd March 2005 @ 10:18:33 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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can u see it
pichture me
sitting on a busy street
wondering day and night
to pass
is this breath gonna be your last
always there in
a coopted up home
like a simple dog whos lost his bone
always there concreat and glass
never no green but shadows of past
harsh ways
city gangs and fights
u could never acept a country wife
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2005-03-02 22:18:33]
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Re: could u see it
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by Quilted_rag_doll on
Thursday, 3rd March 2005 @ 07:06:53 PM AEST
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okays on form, some wrong spelling, pretty good ryhming, overall not bad...
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Re: could u see it
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by visualizing_life on
Thursday, 3rd March 2005 @ 10:41:40 PM AEST
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| i like it!! i most definitly couldnt see it ... ur a country chick at heart... but if u move to the city i promise ill give u a job at my bar...lol....maybe he could accept a country wife..i dunno...luv u |
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