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The Wreck of the St. Marie
Contributed by
Rakerman1999
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Tuesday, 5th April 2005 @ 12:13:35 PM in AEST
Topic:
StoryPoetry
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Gather round and hear the sound of this a tragic tale A ship at sea the St. Marie that floundered in a gale The ocean raged the wind was gauged at knots, one hundred four And beat the sails in hellish wails 'til they could take no more.
The souls aboard prayed to the Lord to save them from the fate of endless sleep in briny deep they knew that did await Some men cried and some men sighed and some laid down to die Some gave up and some gave out and some just said good bye
The bulkheads crack, a broken back the waters filled the hold and stole the air from those trapped there 'til blue and icy cold A final breath, the sting of death their bodies blown and tossed To final graves beneath the waves it sank with all hands lost...
In days of yore upon a shore the wives and children stood to meet their Dads and loving lads but knew they never would They rest their bones with Davey Jones below the fickle sea Until God's call removes them all from the wreck of the St. Marie
L. Carling c2005
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Re: The Wreck of the St. Marie
(User Rating: 1 ) by Jenni_K on
Tuesday, 5th April 2005 @ 12:41:13 PM AEST (User
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Wow Larry!! This was flawless.... I loved the imagery and the flow.
A masterpiece here!!
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Re: The Wreck of the St. Marie
(User Rating: 1 ) by blowfish_jane on
Tuesday, 5th April 2005 @ 04:08:03 PM AEST (User
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Larry, this was just a masterpiece (and i don't say that ever LOL).
I just love the way you're mind works creating such imagery that only you can do.
Lovely stuff.
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Re: The Wreck of the St. Marie
(User Rating: 1 ) by Merry on
Tuesday, 5th April 2005 @ 07:01:47 PM AEST (User
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I agree with the word masterpeice to describe this one. Larry you never cease to amze me with your incredible talent and versitility. You can write on any topic in a variety of styles and it is always to perfection.
daisies for the king
merry |
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Re: The Wreck of the St. Marie
(User Rating: 1 ) by Arsenic on
Tuesday, 5th April 2005 @ 08:15:37 PM AEST (User
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That was interesting. I found the last three lines of the third stanze "Their bodies..." to be a little ackward...had to re-read that part. Still, nicely rhymed. |
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Re: The Wreck of the St. Marie
(User Rating: 1 ) by freckle on
Tuesday, 5th April 2005 @ 09:09:45 PM AEST (User
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What an absolutly marvelous write! I love this! Great flow, great descriptions....just darn great! Masterful!
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Re: The Wreck of the St. Marie
(User Rating: 1 ) by shelby on
Wednesday, 6th April 2005 @ 12:53:37 AM AEST (User
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ding dong the King is back home! and you said that you were not able to write your smokin the screen my friend I can hardly see!
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Re: The Wreck of the St. Marie
(User Rating: 1 ) by Kie on
Wednesday, 6th April 2005 @ 08:31:03 AM AEST (User
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Oh this is my new favorite. You know when I read the calm before the storm, I told you I saw a sea captain in my mind writing in a log--before a storm came on.
Then you followed with this one and it is marvelous and WOWSERS---I have to say it is you at your best.
It reaches your heart, twists and turns it like the powerful waves, drags you under and leaves you mourning for all the people who lie sleeping beneath the sea.
*****Stars
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Re: The Wreck of the St. Marie
(User Rating: 1 ) by Fionndruinne on
Friday, 8th April 2005 @ 04:14:10 PM AEST (User
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Well done! This style reminds me a lot of Robert service (a favorite of mine). An enjoyable read.
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Re: The Wreck of the St. Marie
(User Rating: 1 ) by ForeverAlone on
Sunday, 15th May 2005 @ 02:16:49 PM AEST (User
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This is so awesome...I really have to read this again before I go read more of your work..
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Re: The Wreck of the St. Marie
(User Rating: 1 ) by vibes2go on
Monday, 18th July 2005 @ 08:45:24 PM AEST (User
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I love the name .. LOL so close to my own. do you know I read it a long, long time ago. Shortly after it was first posted .. it reminds me of Whitman. better, maybe.
You won't be recognized until you're dead .. that's the way with poetry .. you know that don't you? You make me weep with your brilliance .. |
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Re: The Wreck of the St. Marie
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Monday, 15th October 2007 @ 01:01:48 AM AEST (User
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Well-written,entertaining poem.Great read,
Den |
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